Aidan Scamby

   
   This is a good start on the first writing assignment.  
   You have done a good job, for the most part, on the 
   "they say" part.  The major thing I would advise you
   to change is the way you refer to the authors of the 
   "GMOs are not `Frankenfoods'" article.  It is true 
   that both of them have appointments at Yale, but why
   did you decide to keep mentioning that repeatedly?
   I don't think you meant it in a sarcastic or taunting
   way, but it almost sounds like that.  If, on the other
   hand, you merely wanted to do that to establish their 
   credibility, then mentioning their institutional affiliation 
   once is sufficient.  

   I have made a number of suggestions for rewording
   or rewriting things directly on a printout of the 
   paper.  Ask me what I meant if the markings are not
   clear. 

   One of the main points of the Laskawy article
   is that increased resistance to pesticides and herbicides 
   is negating the benefits of GMO crops.  The interesting
   point here is that that resistance develops naturally 
   through evolution.  In effect, the genomes of the
   pests and the weeds are changing in response to 
   our genetic modification of the crops.  Some people
   compare the situation to an arms race where neither
   side can ever gain a decisive advantage.