Jack McCauley

   This is a good start on the first writing assignment.  
   You have done a good job, for the most part, on the 
   "they say" part.  The main things I think you need
   to get into this section that are not there already
   are some of the details each of the articles includes.
   (See comments below.)

   I have made a number of suggestions for rewording
   or rewriting things directly on a printout of the 
   paper.  Ask me what I meant if the markings are not
   clear.  

   Comments:

   1.  What concerns?  These are also definitely 
   related to the points raised by Laskawy, so 
   you might introduce more of the details here, 
   then come back to those points when you discuss
   the other article.  

   2.  It's unclear exactly what you mean by "business 
   of farming."  There are the individual farmers who
   are in that business to make a living.  There are
   also the big "agribusiness companies" like Monsanto
   and Syngenta that develop the GMO crop varieties and
   lease them to the farmers to plant, while retaining
   ownership of the intellectual property represented 
   by those crop varieties.  Who is really being helped 
   by GMOs, according to Tom Laskawy?

   PS:  One of the main points of the Laskawy article
   is that increased resistance to pesticides and herbicides 
   is negating the benefits of GMO crops.  The interesting
   point here is that that resistance develops naturally 
   through evolution.  In effect, the genomes of the
   pests and the weeds are changing in response to 
   our genetic modification of the crops.  Some people
   compare the situation to an arms race where neither
   side can ever gain a decisive advantage.