Nick Olsofka

   This is a good start on the first writing assignment.  
   You have done a good job, for the most part, on the 
   "they say" part.  The major criticism I have is that
   it would be good to go into more detail on why Greenbaum
   and Gerstein are saying GMOs should not be rejected 
   out of fear (that is, describing exactly what the benefits
   are that using these crops is supposed to produce), and 
   then saying more about why Laskawy is saying GMOs have
   not lived up to the claims made for them.  For instance,
   one of the main points of the Laskawy article
   is that increased resistance to pesticides and herbicides 
   is negating the benefits of GMO crops.  The interesting
   point here is that that resistance develops naturally 
   through evolution.  In effect, the genomes of the
   pests and the weeds are changing in response to 
   our genetic modification of the crops.  Some people
   compare the situation to an arms race where neither
   side can ever gain a decisive advantage.  

   I have made a number of suggestions for rewording
   or rewriting things directly on a printout of the 
   paper.  Ask me what I meant if the markings are not
   clear.