David Mendoza -- Bernie Sanders' Metamorphosis

   The metamorphosis stories in Ovid might seem strange and almost "random"
   to us, but when you look at them carefully, it turns out that they (and
   the myths they are based on) always have a sort of internal logic.  The 
   change almost always comes as either a reward or a punishment for something 
   the "metamorphosee" has done, or sometimes for something they are.  In addition, 
   the agent of the metamorphosis is always a god--an agent who has a well-defined 
   and established power to effect the transformation.  

   I think you have followed both parts of this pretty well, although punishing
   Bernie for his election loss by turning him specifically into an eagle seems 
   questionable. When a human being is turned into an animal in one of Ovid's mythical 
   tales, the animal usually has some easily understandable connection with the 
   "metamorphosee."  For instance, Actaeon the hunter gets turned into a stag
   because he was out hunting as he happened on Diana and her nymphs as they 
   bathe -- he was a hunter of stags, so he now becomes the hunted animal and 
   his dogs tear him to shreds. 

   Why an eagle? Why is being turned into an eagle an especially 
   appropriate punishment for Bernie?  This is the weak point of the way your 
   story works, for me.  Eagles generally have good connotations -- they tend to 
   be symbols of power and independence, they have extremely sharp eyesight, 
   are excellent predators, etc.  So, if anything, being turned into an eagle
   might even be a reward more than a punishment(!)  On the other hand, the 
   idea of a politician being turned into something that cannot speak or vocalize
   DOES seem more like a punishment.  So the message here seems to be not
   very clear and somewhat mixed.  An idea just came to me -- what if Bernie
   was turned into an owl (like Athena's other owl companions)?
   
   It's OK to satirize aspects of a genre too, so your invocation of the 
   Gods and Goddesses at the start is fine, and rather funny.  But "May
   The Goddesses caress my metamorphosis to their elegant faces" is 
   slightly weird, though!
   
   I would say that there's a case to be made for the way you use sentence
   fragments in the story/poem itself.  It's easy to see and understand
   the effect you are going for.  However, in "Part B" (the analysis), you
   shouldn't use them the same way. "However at the same time has a representation"
   is not a complete sentence -- it has no subject(!)  A few other writing 
   issues:  "represent the continue believe" should be "represent the continued
   belief."  "satire to how “The Metamorphosis of Ovid” started" should be 
   "satire of the way the Metamorphoses of Ovid started"  ("metamorphosis"
   is the singular form; "metamorphoses" is the plural, and the "of Ovid"
   is not actually a part of the actual title of the book).  Similarly "While the 
   middle and towards the end serve as a combination of sarcasm as well as grotesque"
   is not a complete sentence either.  When you use "while" this way you are 
   setting up a contrast between what you say in that clause AND the part that
   comes after that clause: "While Thursday was beatiful, on Friday the snows 
   of winter returned with a vengeance."

   Content:  B+

   Mechanics:  B+