Jillian Bowdring -- Metamorphosis of Anne Frank

   The metamorphosis stories in Ovid might seem strange and almost "random"
   to us, but when you look at them carefully, it turns out that they (and
   the myths they are based on) always have a sort of internal logic.  The 
   change almost always comes as either a reward or a punishment for something 
   the "metamorphosee" has done, or sometimes for something they are.  In addition, the 
   effector of the metamorphosis is always a god--an agent who has a well-defined 
   and established power to effect the transformation. 

   Apart from a few small typos or slips ("girls" instead of "girl's" on line 3 of the 
   first page; "boney" instead of "bony" in the description of her knees in the middle
   of the second page) this is very well-written and your analysis is also good.  I
   don't doubt that Anne Frank herself might have had dreams of escape by means of
   a transformation like this.  However, I think we have to be very cognizant of   
   the fact that she *did not escape* in her real life and those dreams of escape
   remained just that -- dreams.  So I think some readers of your story might find it 
   to be almost a denial of the true meaning of her life and what it can teach us about 
   humans' capacity for evil if the transformation is read literally.  It might be
   better, perhaps, to treat the transformation as something that takes place 
   entirely in Anne's mind rather than as an actual physical metamorphosis.  That's 
   stretching the boundaries of the way Ovid tells his stories, I know, but I think
   it might have been even more effective (something like Ofelia's escape into the 
   fantasy world at the end of Pan's Labyrinth, in fact!) -- the final scene could
   show Anne's broken body with the German camp guards standing over it, while her 
   spirit soars into the sky like the butterfly.


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