Ave Taylor-Kelley -- Flatland Women

  You are right that Part I of Flatland was written mainly as a satire of attitudes
  prevalent in Abbott's own society (Victorian England).  The main criticism I have
  of your paper, though, is that you have not really said very much about what
  that means.  First, you don't really discuss what a satire is, or consists of.  
  Then, you have not shown what it is about the ways Abbott describes the Flatland 
  women that really shows he intended the book as a satire.  I would say it's the 
  exaggerated tone and the language he uses in passages like this one:  "For as 
  they have no pretensions of an angle, being inferior in this respect to the very 
  lowest of the Isosceles, they are consequently wholly devoid of brain power ... "  
  The tone in phrases like "no pretensions of an angle" and "the lowest of the 
  Isosceles" is pretty much "over the top."  That should be a pretty clear signal 
  to the reader that Abbott is engaging in satire.

  Having said that, though, I want to point out that although (as you say)
  this book was written over 100 years ago, the kinds of things A. Square says 
  are not all that far from things one used to hear all the time.  Look at the 
  first seasons of the TV show "Mad Men" (set in the early 1960's) for an pretty 
  realistic example of this.  Similarly, when I was growing up I remember hearing 
  serious discussions from "talking heads" about how women were too emotional and 
  unstable to be trusted with the sorts of decisions a President would have to make
  for instance.  Things are somewhat different now, but those attitudes can still
  be heard and found.

  On the writing front, I think you need to proof-read your papers more carefully.
  Unfortunately, there are several sentences like this one toward the bottom of 
  page 1:

  "This would be a great bound for women, sadly Square is not doing this for women 
  to become equal with me." 

  I don't think "bound" is the word you wanted -- maybe "boon" (i.e. a benefit
  or a good thing).  The "me" at the end should be "men" I think.  Finally, 
  it would be good to indicate the connection between the first part of the 
  sentence and the second part by adding something like a "but":  This would
  be a great boon for women, but sady the Square is not doing this so that
  women will become equal with men."
  

  Content:  B-

  Mechanics: B+