Quinn Suydam -- Women in Flatland

   It might be hard to appreciate for students today, but the kinds 
   of things A. Square says are not all that far from things one
   used to hear all the time.  Look at the first seasons of the TV show 
   "Mad Men" (set in the early 1960's) for an pretty realistic example of this. 
   Similarly, when I was growing up I remember hearing serious discussions 
   from "talking heads" about how women were too emotional and unstable to 
   be trusted with the sorts of decisions a President would have to make.  

   I think you have caught the satirical tone Abbott uses.  The major thing
   that is missing is taking apart one of the Square's pronoucements and
   explaining exactly what is so exaggerated and infuriating about those
   expressions.  

   The writing is very good here for the most part.  A few sentences could
   be streamlined and/or rewritten to flow better.  For instance,  on page 
   2, the sentence "Abbott emphasizes of this point saying, “the very Laws 
   of Evolution seem suspended in her (women) disfavor” doesn't 
   work because the women is plural but her is singular. (The "of" earlier 
   in the sentence is also superfluous.)
   
   You could say something like "Abbott emphasizes this point saying, “the very 
   Laws of Evolution seem suspended in [a woman's] disfavor”  The [ ] indicates
   that you are changing that part of the quotation for grammatical reasons
   to make it fit into your sentence.

   Content: A-

   Mechanics: A-