Jillian Bowdring -- Satirical Portrayal of the Flatland Women

  I think you are exactly right in your explanation of Abbott's
  satirical intentions in his portrayal of the women in Flatland.
  It might be hard to appreciate for students today, but the kinds 
  of things A. Square says are not all that far from things one
  used to hear all the time.  Look at the first seasons of the TV show 
  "Mad Men" (set in the early 1960's) for an pretty realistic example of this. 
  Similarly, when I was growing up I remember hearing serious discussions 
  from "talking heads" about how women were too emotional and unstable to 
  be trusted with the sorts of decisions a President would have to make. 
  (This is in reference to your digression on the women candidates in
  the recent Presidential election!)
  
  Your writing is generally good, but I think there are times when some
  more detailed editing would help get your points across more effectively.  
  For example, in your first paragraph (my comments marked with the >
  characters):

  In his novel, Flatland, Edwin A. Abbott satirizes the prejudice attitudes 
  that were common in the Victorian Era by inventing a world where the 
  characters are geometric shapes with relatable personalities. These ideals 
  are disguised by using universal idea of shapes while also giving them personalities 
  to help the reader relate. 

> I think you meant "prejudiced" in the first sentence.  Also, the second 
  sentence really just repeats the ideas that the geometric shapes are
  universal but the Flatland characters have personalities so that they
  relate to human characters in real life.  I don't think the second sentence
  adds anything, so it is not necessary.

  Each character’s shape determines his or her status in society. The highest 
  authorities in this society are circles and are exclusively male, while the 
  lowest class consists of lines and they are exclusively female. 

> This is all good.

  Abbott did this to portray the inequality of social classes during the Victorian Era. 
  Through explaining Flatland’s nature, its inhabitants, and the role and suppression 
  of women, Abbott is able to purposefully create a satire that exposes the inequality 
  of women during the Victorian Era.

> Here again, it seems as though there is a lot of duplication between these
  two sentences.  I think something like the second one could stand alone as the 
  link between the opening paragraph and what follows.  But even that second
  sentence could also be tightened up by deleting the "is able to:" "By explaining 
  Flatland’s nature, its inhabitants, and the role and suppression 
  of women, Abbott purposefully creates a satire that exposes the inequality 
  of women during the Victorian Era."

Content:  A-

Mechanics: B+