Kong Xiong -- Borders of Knowledge and Self (paper 2 rewrite)

  This is definitely improved over the original version. The main comment I have
  now is that the final sentence in your first paragraph:  "A border between belief and 
  knowledge and a self-border within this experiment and the experiment’s result, as well 
  as Herodotus’s analysis of the experiment, challenge us to take on our beliefs and come 
  up with our own reasoned answers and conclusions" is quite complicated.  If you find
  yourself writing something like this, it might be a good idea to split it up into two
  or more sentences.  Also, I was not exactly sure what you meant by the "self-border"
  within the experiment.  I understand you are referring to the fact that, on the basis
  of the result of the experiment, the Egyptians thought they had acknowledge something
  about themselves, namely that they were not the oldest people.  However, I don't quite
  see how that is a border and why that is not subsumed by the border between belief and
  knowledge that you (rightly) identify out as the first main type of border involved in
  this passage.  

  Another comment: You say Herodotus "exemplifies a lifestyle of acceptance of what he is 
  told."  First, I'm not sure that really qualifies as a "lifestyle."  I think maybe an 
  "attitude" or a "tendency" would fit better there.  More importantly, the reason I'm 
  pointing this out is that unlike most people, Herodotus also went out into the world 
  and apparently spent most of his life doing the research to write his Histories.  He 
  does not always accept things uncritically, either.  He weighs the evidence carefully
  and often says things like: "This is what I was told and I report it as such.  I don't 
  believe it, though."

  There are also still a few small writing slips, but nothing major:

  On page 2, "A lifestyle with little doubt of what is the truth and what is right."
             is not a complete sentence (no main verb).

  At the top of page 3, "lifestyles" should be singular
                        "doubles checks" should be "double-checks"

  Content: B+

  Mechanics: A-