Michael Melch -- Egyptian Cultural Borders (paper 2 rewrite)

  Your new title is a good addition, and this is generally a very good improvement
  over the first version.  But I think you still need to think more about
  how paragraphs function in an essay.  For instance, the long paragraph
  that starts at the bottom of page 1 is quite long and it covers several different
  topics.  The sentence on page 2, "Another way that Herodotus creates a border between 
  Egypt and other places is through their writing system." would be a natural topic
  sentence for a new paragraph.   Similarly, a bit farther down in that large 
  paragraph, "Herodotus does not make the reader aware of the source[s] of his 
  information ... " would be another natural place to break the previous paragraph 
  and start a new one.  

  The main question I have now concerns your overall evaluation of the passage
  in your conclusion.  Using the words "backwards, inverted" to describe Egyptian
  culture introduces some additional negative connotations (beyond just saying
  "opposite").  Did you mean to say that you think Herodotus is criticizing the
  Egyptians because they do things in the "opposite" way?  If so, can you point
  to a particular place that is giving you that impression?  To me, it does not
  seem that he is doing that; I would argue Herodotus is just saying the Egyptians 
  are interesting because they are different.  

  Content:  A-

  Mechanics:  A-