David, 

     I think your own experiences with ADHD have given you a special perspective
   on "the curious incident" and I'm glad that you felt comfortable enough to
   share that in this essay.  What you are saying here is good but the essay
   would have been even better if you had also focused on one or two episodes 
   from the novel and really "dug deeper" to analyze how they connected with 
   your main points. On the whole, I think the final version of the essay turned 
   out pretty well.  
  
    One thing I noticed, though, in reading your earlier drafts was that while 
   Google Docs makes it very easy to revise a piece of writing ``on the fly,'' 
   it is (unfortunately) very easy to focus on one part of one sentence and 
   miss how things fit together on a larger scale of whole paragraphs or the 
   whole essay.  There are still a few "rough spots" -- see below.  

     I can tell that the process of getting your thoughts down on paper in 
   English isn't always easy for you.  If you would like, and in addition 
   to the comments I will give you on all the writing for our Montserrat
   seminar, I can help you make contact with some of the resources on campus
   that might be useful in helping you to develop your writing facility 
   (like the Writer's Workshop run by the Center for Writing and the programs
   available through Academic Services and Learning Resources).  I know this 
   might seem like some of the same sort of "special help" you rejected earlier.
   But there are people on campus dedicated to seeing that all of our students 
   get to a really high standard of writing and I hope you will consider making
   use of their assistance.    

   Specific comments:

   (1)   Your second sentence:  "In my opinion Mark Haddon, the author of *the 
         curious incident of the dog in the night-time* has come to understand 
         the minds of humans who have a way of thinking of thinking ... "
         Note that "of thinking" is repeated.

   (2)   Later in first paragraph:  "But it all depends, if they are willing ... "
         This would flow better if you said "But it all depends on whether they 
         are willing ... "

   (3)   Did something go wrong in this sentence in your second paragraph:
         "He follows this simple pattern take and store"?  Or did you mean
         the "take and store" to be something like the commands you might
         give to a computer?  To indicate that you might say something like 
         "His brain seems to follow a simple pattern, following commands like
         'take' and 'store' on all the information that comes in through his
         senses."  Or did you mean something else?  Another point you 
         might make here is that our brains all work this way to some extent.
         Christopher's difficulty is that he has difficulty turning the "take 
         and store" off in situations where most of us can do that without
         thinking about it.  

   Content: 85 (B)

   Mechanics: 88 (B+)