Callan Hendershott -- Paper 3, Wild

Excellent work!  Your chosen passage is an interesting one and you have developed
a very satisfying interpretation of what leads Cheryl Strayed to cry for the first
time on her hike.  The last sentence and the "fifty-some hard days on the trail 
and 9,760 days that had come before them too" (that is, all of her previous life)
have gotten Cheryl Strayed to a place where she can really start her life as an 
adult, to where she is "full."  

I have a few mechanical comments -- there are a number of times when you use direct
quotations but you need to make a lot of changes to fit the grammar of the sentences
you want to write.  You are doing that completely correctly from the technical 
standpoint. But if you need to do a lot of that to make things work, it's probably
better not to use the direct quotation.   It becomes a chore to read some of 
those chopped-up and reworded sentences.  Paraphrasing is OK in that situation; you 
can still put in a reference to the page where the passage you are drawing from 
is located.  Also there were a very few places (see page 3 for instance) where
tenses within a paragraph are not consistent.  But your writing here is generally 
very good, direct, and fluent.  


   Content/Evidence -- A

   Structure/Mechanics -- A