Francois, 

Your "serious" paper on Hamlet is excellent work.

Specific comments -- note that most are keyed to specific passages in your paper, which
are quoted before the comment itself:

"Not only that, but Ophelia’s death contributes directly to Hamlet’s increased stress of 
his own life situation, subsequently resulting in his duel with Laertes which leads to his 
untimely death."  The "increased stress of his own life situation" is a very indirect and 
roundabout way of stating this.  The deaths of Ophelia and Polonius lead Laertes to 
seek revenge and that leads directly to the fateful duel with Hamlet in Act 5.  

I think it's very natural to read Polonius's attitudes toward his children as love, and 
it's clear that in the production we saw in Fenwick Theater, Prof. Vineberg's portrayal
of Polonius emphasized that aspect of his character.  However, I think it's good to realize
that other possible readings exist too. Sometimes Polonius is portrayed as a much less 
loving "control freak" and busybody who simply wants dominance over his children for the 
ways they can increase his power and influence in the court.   

"For instance, when Polonius dies, Laertes’ love for his father is made clear."
A question for you:  Is seeking vengeance for the murder of a father always a sign of love?
Couldn't it also be a question of justice or maintaining the honor of the family?  Couldn't 
Laertes be seeking vengeance for the loss of father he really didn't even like that much?  
Can you point to a specific instance where Laertes clearly shows he loved his father?
(This is different, of course, from his love for his sister.  That is clearly expressed.)

"His desire to keep his elaborate plot to kill Hamlet intact is greater than his desire to 
keep Gertrude alive, who we would initially conclude to be someone he loves, considering 
they are married to one another."  This is rather convoluted and the whole last clause
doesn't fit well. The main sentence has the form "X is greater than Y", where Y is
the desire.  But the final clause refers to Gertrude rather than the desire.  How about:
"His desire to keep his elaborate plot to kill Hamlet intact is greater than his desire to
keep Gertrude, his wife and presumably the object of his love, alive."

Content -- A

Structure/Mechanics -- A