Michael, 

Your "serious" essay on Hamlet has some very good ideas.  But there
are a few small writing/usage issues I found.   These specific comments are geared
to particular passages in your text (usually quoted to begin that item):

"never the less" -- should be all one word

"Claudius, Polonius, Gertrude and Ophelia are not acting on in revenge but rather 
solely on their dedication to various loves wordily or otherwise"  (?)  In "on in"
one of those is superfluous.  The choice "wordily" is not very clear -- I 
don't know what you meant by that.  Is this the word you wanted, or is it a typo 
for "worldly?"

"At the loss of his father, Hamlet's other loves are superseded by his love for his 
father which has now become revenge."  I think you mean something like " ... which 
has now become a desire for revenge." 

"His other loves though sometime reciprocated end up only effecting Hamlet in that 
they get between him and revenge, with the exception of Horatio."  I know what you 
mean here and it is a good observation.  But the sentence itself is awkward.  
Something like this would flow better:  "His other loves, with the exception of the
love he feels for Horatio, and even when reciprocated, only end up affecting Hamlet in
that they get between him and revenge."  (Note the change from "effect" to "affect;"
look them up in a dictionary or useage manual.)

"Laertes family bonds were very strong, we see it in his relationship with Ophelia, 
and in Polonius' caring and protective attitude towards the both of them."
First "Laertes" needs a following apostrophe to show the possessive.  Next, the first 
comma is not correct -- use a semicolon to separate complete sentences, or break
into two separate sentences.  Also, I think it's very natural to read Polonius's 
attitudes toward his children as love, and it's clear that in the production we saw 
in Fenwick Theater, Prof. Vineberg's portrayal of Polonius emphasized that aspect of
his character.  However, I think it's good to realize that other possible readings
exist too. Sometimes Polonius is portrayed as a much less loving "control freak" 
and busybody who simply wants dominance over his children for the ways they can
increase his power and influence in the court.   

You seem to be acknowledging this other side of Polonius in the next paragraph, 
which is good.  But in "Moving to the other characters, we see how their loves though 
not leading to revenge are equally important in shaping their final outcomes.  Claudius, 
Polonius, and Gertrude are lead on by worldly loves of power, security, and influence" -- 
need a pair commas around the clause "though not leading to revenge."  Also "lead" should
be "led."

In the paragraph on Ophelia, you usually bestow something on someone else, not to them.

Content -- A

Structure/Mechanics -- B+