Jack, 

Your "lighter" paper on Hamlet is very good.  You eventually caught the spirit of the assignment
well.  There are one or two places, though, where your "news story" doesn't describe the actual
events of the play accurately.  I can chalk one of these up to an inaccurate witness
or a reporting mistake, though

The specific comments below are keyed to particular passages in your text, which are usually
quoted to start:

"His reasoning was that if Claudius reacted to the scene where King Hamlet was killed, "he 
would react in some way," Fortinbras recalled Horatio saying."  Don't you mean something 
like:  "His reasoning was that if Claudius saw the *reenactment of the scene where King Hamlet 
was killed*, “he would react in some way.""  Don't forget that the play within a play is 
only showing the murder of King Hamlet by association, or by implication.  It's actually
"The Murder of Gonzago," and Prince Hamlet has instructed the players to add actions that
are designed to "catch the conscience of the King" (i.e. to make Claudius react).  

"Laertes, Ophelia’s brother, who had been staying in France, returned to Denmark furious
about his sister’s death."  Actually, in the play, when he arrives, Laertes only knows that 
his father (Polonius) is dead and he demands Claudius to tell him what happened with
the old man.  The news that Ophelia has drowned too only arrives during the course 
of Act 4, scene 7 (after he arrives), so Laertes learns that new piece of terrible news
at the same time everyone else besides Gertrude does.  This is the sort of small detail 
that could easily get lost or overlooked in a real situation of this sort though, so I'll 
chalk it up to the overall confusion in the castle and a slightly fallible source :)

Again, a slightly fallible source:  "Hamlet managed to cut Laertes with his own
blade, which is evidence that it was poisoned, and while Laertes was dying, ... "
What you wrote here is somewhat ambiguous.  It could mean that Laertes was cut with 
*Hamlet's* sword (and that would be the most common way to read this sentence -- the 
"his own" would refer back to the subject of the sentence).  But I think I can see
you did not mean that.  I think you are actually alluding to the fact that the swords 
were inadvertently swapped during the duel, so Hamlet ends up with the sword Laertes 
had to start with, and that's why he cuts Laertes with the poisoned tip.  That would be 
really hard even for a sharp-eyed witness to catch during the action.
(Make sure you understand what happened though :)

"It is Ludacris to say the very least. I’ve never seen anything so cruel mad happen in any 
case really, let alone WITHIN A FAMILY."  The tone of indignation doesn't really seem
to fit the rest of the news story, which seems to enjoy the salacious tidbits more(!)

"who just wanted death upon Claudius" -- better: "who just wanted Claudius to die" or
"who just wanted Claudius dead" (for some reason).    

Content -- A-

Structure/Mechanics -- A-