Brendan, 

     This is a good improvement over the first version, especially in the 
   matters of organization I pointed out the first time.  The only big comment
   I have now is that I think you are reading selfishness into some of Odysseus's
   actions where that is a somewhat questionable characterization of his real
   character.  And there is one place where what you say really does not accord
   with what the text says.  At the top of your last page, you say that Odysseus
   gives in and eats the cows of Helios together with his men.  That is never 
   really stated explicitly if you read that passage in Book 12 closely.  What Homer
   says is that Odysseus "chews out" each of his men who participated in the 
   killing, and he acknowledges that there is nothing to be done about it at that
   point because the cows are dead.  But Homer never actually says he eats the
   flesh himself -- it's the men who gorge on the meat but not explicitly Odysseus.  
   Now you might argue that it would not be credible for Odysseus to hold back when
   he doesn't know where his next meal will be coming from at that point.  But
   that would be your assertion and you would have to back it up with other 
   instances of actual selfishness.  I'm not sure that is so easy, because a
   lot of what you are seeing as selfishness is, I would say, really some 
   combination of pride, brutality (partly brought out simply by the experience 
   of war), and desire for fame.  This is one thing about Odysseus that makes
   him such a compelling character, I think -- he's a recognizably human, flawed
   person.  He's "god-like," supremely cunning, and very proud of himself. But 
   he can also get carried away by that pride.  And he really does have deep 
   feelings that I think we have to admit are real and true, even if he doesn't
   change in the ways we might think he should, or that we expect him to.

   Content/Evidence

   B+

   Structure/Mechanics

   B+